C0 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 28 conv. C1 Is this written at an advanced level: "Ah Ryan, you're a handsome bastard for su 25 conv. C2 Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , the deep pressure 21 conv. C3 Here's a scene based on a prompt to put my character in a graveyard in the snow: 18 conv. C4 Is this better? Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rotting in the dayli 17 conv. C5 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt × 16 conv. C6 "Liam's hair, laden with splinters of ice and snow, stuck out from his low-slung 16 conv. C7 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 11 conv. C8 Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes lighting with 11 conv. C9 Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays 11 conv. C10 Is this an idealised portrayal: But you said mine is too idealised ok, what if i 9 conv. C11 How is this piece of writing : As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his thro 8 conv. C12 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 7 conv. C13 The sub-zero teeth pierced his flesh as the flare of saline bled through his por 5 conv. C14 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 5 conv. C15 Maybe it was the lack of heat on his skin, after hours of drowning in the sunlig 4 conv. C16 due to Elara's pregnancy being smooth sailing and healthy, if not deeply sensual 3 conv. C17 Filtered As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , d 3 conv. C18 Hey, where's your mom and dad , huh? " Ryan asked, the girl's tiny amber irises 3 conv. C19 His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, slumped against the s 3 conv. C20 Is this smooth : Liam collapsed into the unforgiving embrace of the concrete, hi 3 conv. C21 Please don't finish it "That scar , I wasn't conscious when they-. " As if expec 2 conv. C22 Valen's voice filtered into the depths of Ryan's pleading body as his boots were 2 conv. C23 How about this : Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , 2 conv. C24 She nodded, biting her lip as she drew a quiet strength from deep within her abd 2 conv. C25 Do the metaphors add to the narrative without clouding it?: As Valen suctioned h 2 conv. C26 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 2 conv. C27 "Well, seeing as I'm here , and you still look as terrible as you did before-hit 2 conv. C28 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 2 conv. C29 Is this narrative inspiring.. should I aim to write like this author ? Cartridge 2 conv. C30 His eyes scanned the horizon in deportation, his spine wracked with shivers as h 2 conv.