C0 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 28 conv. C1 Is this written at an advanced level: "Ah Ryan, you're a handsome bastard for su 25 conv. C2 Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , the deep pressure 21 conv. C3 Here's a scene based on a prompt to put my character in a graveyard in the snow: 18 conv. C4 Is this better? Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rotting in the dayli 17 conv. C5 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 16 conv. C6 "Liam's hair, laden with splinters of ice and snow, stuck out from his low-slung 16 conv. C7 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 11 conv. C8 Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes lighting with 11 conv. C9 Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays 11 conv. C10 Is this an idealised portrayal: But you said mine is too idealised ok, what if i 9 conv. C11 How is this piece of writing : As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his thro 8 conv. C12 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w × 7 conv. C13 The sub-zero teeth pierced his flesh as the flare of saline bled through his por 5 conv. C14 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 5 conv. C15 Maybe it was the lack of heat on his skin, after hours of drowning in the sunlig 4 conv. C16 due to Elara's pregnancy being smooth sailing and healthy, if not deeply sensual 3 conv. C17 Filtered As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , d 3 conv. C18 Hey, where's your mom and dad , huh? " Ryan asked, the girl's tiny amber irises 3 conv. C19 His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, slumped against the s 3 conv. C20 Is this smooth : Liam collapsed into the unforgiving embrace of the concrete, hi 3 conv. C21 Please don't finish it "That scar , I wasn't conscious when they-. " As if expec 2 conv. C22 Valen's voice filtered into the depths of Ryan's pleading body as his boots were 2 conv. C23 How about this : Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , 2 conv. C24 She nodded, biting her lip as she drew a quiet strength from deep within her abd 2 conv. C25 Do the metaphors add to the narrative without clouding it?: As Valen suctioned h 2 conv. C26 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 2 conv. C27 "Well, seeing as I'm here , and you still look as terrible as you did before-hit 2 conv. C28 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 2 conv. C29 Is this narrative inspiring.. should I aim to write like this author ? Cartridge 2 conv. C30 His eyes scanned the horizon in deportation, his spine wracked with shivers as h 2 conv.