Proofread: Mino is an office lady who rides the daily commute train. Her beauty quickly attracts the unwanted attention of a group of local perverts who surround her. However, she eventually ends up developing a liking for the attention and actively seeks it out. Rewrite: Mino, an office lady, commutes daily on the train. Her beauty quickly catches the eye of a group of local perverts who gather around her. Despite initially unwanted attention, she eventually grows to enjoy it and actively seeks out their presence.