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“proofread, edit and improve the style of the excerpt of my sci-fi fantasy novel:” (1 conversations)
13 turns Oct 28, 2023 at 4:30 PM BST United Kingdom , Manchester
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proofread, edit and improve the style of the excerpt of my sci-fi fantasy novel: Later, I myself, and some volunteers of the police force together eradicate the outlaws and disable their illegal operations in the summer solar system. When some of our forces are killed, they are martyred by the goddess Diana and upgraded to superior solar systems. Conversely, some of these outlaws are killed or injured, punished. And they are sent to the underworld or the hell of the first world. Elections are held safely and soundly. The Moderates party wins the elections successfully. The previous overlord gets elected as the lord of the summer solar system again. And this time through the votes of the people and their wishes, not because he was loyal to Princess Pary and me.
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Later, I personally led a team of volunteers from the police force to effectively eradicate the outlaws and dismantle their illegal operations within the summer solar system. Tragically, some of our brave forces lost their lives in the line of duty, being immortalized as martyrs by the benevolent goddess Diana and transferred to superior solar systems. On the other hand, the outlaws who were either killed or injured faced just retribution, banished to the dark underworld or the treacherous depths of the first world. During this tumultuous period, elections were conducted smoothly and securely. Ultimately, the Moderates party emerged victorious, achieving a resounding triumph in the electoral process. Remarkably, the former overlord, who had once held power through his allegiance to Princess Pary and myself, was elected as the lord of the summer solar system once more. However, this time, his ascent to power was a result of the genuine support and desires of the people, rather than mere loyalty to the two of us.
USER
Through a formal ceremony, the elected overlord, mayors, and judges at the presence of Princess Pary take an oath to stay loyal to the laws of the summer solar system. And after the official ceremony, a glorious celebration begins, hoping for a better life and happiness for all. Meanwhile, Diana's personal spacecraft arrives and the messenger informs the Princess her husband and newly elected lord of my speedy return to the spring solar system, at Diana's behest. All of a sudden, the crowd notices of my departure and desperately tries to prevent me from leaving them. The Princess and her husband try to calm people down. I am impressed strongly by their affections and say, "Farewell, my friends," and then I leave the summer solar system.
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In a solemn ceremony, the newly elected overlord, along with mayors and judges, pledged their unwavering loyalty to the laws of the summer solar system in the presence of Princess Pary. This oath served as a symbol of their commitment to upholding justice and order within their realm. As soon as the official proceedings concluded, a jubilant celebration ensued, filled with hope and anticipation for a prosperous future and collective happiness. Amidst the festivities, a magnificent spacecraft belonging to Diana, the revered goddess, gracefully descended. A messenger delivered the news to Princess Pary that her husband, the newly elected lord, urgently needed to return to the spring solar system at Diana's request. Suddenly, the crowd became aware of my impending departure and urgently sought to impede my exit. Princess Pary and her husband made valiant efforts to pacify the gathering, attempting to assuage their concerns. Witnessing their genuine affection and support deeply moved me, and so I expressed my farewell, saying, "Farewell, my friends," before departing from the summer solar system.
USER
farewell has been repeated in the last sentence
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In response to the sudden revelation of my departure, the crowd, filled with desperation, made frantic attempts to prevent me from leaving their midst. Princess Pary and her husband, in a valiant effort, worked tirelessly to calm the people, assuring them that all would be well. Their display of affection and concern profoundly touched me, and with a heavy heart, I bid my farewell to those gathered, uttering, "Goodbye, my friends," as I embarked on my journey away from the summer solar system.
USER
When the spaceship lands on the proximity of the castle in the spring planet, I am immediately going to the Diana's presence to report my duties. Surprisingly, I encounter a scene where Gabriel is sitting on Diana's sofa, and Diana and Omega are standing on his sides respectfully. I am embarrassed. It is just like that is the first time I encounter with Holy Gabriel. Gabriel notices my confusion and for helping me to come back to myself says in a friendly tone, and just like the old -times, "How are you, John? I have heard you gone through your training and missions successfully."
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As the spaceship touched down near the castle in the spring planet, I wasted no time in making my way to Diana's presence to fulfill my duty and report the outcome of my endeavors. To my astonishment, a peculiar scene awaited me: Gabriel, the esteemed Holy Being, was seated on Diana's sofa, with Diana and Omega flanking him respectfully. Caught off guard by this unexpected sight, I couldn't help but feel a sense of unease. It was as if encountering Gabriel for the first time all over again. Sensing my disconcertment, Gabriel, ever the understanding soul, endeavored to put me at ease with his familiar and friendly tone, remarking, "How are you, John? I've heard of your successful training and missions."
USER
Now I gain my confidence and say, "I am fine, as you have assigned the best trainer and master for me." The goddess Diana and Omega express their gratitude for me being so polite and humble. Then Gabriel says, "Well, we all have to fly over to the central planet of the fourth universe to get at the presence of Jesus." A luxurious spaceship is waiting for us outside the castle. During our travel, I ask Omega if she knows anything about the reason that Jesus has called us in.
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Regaining my composure, I confidently replied, "I am well, thanks to the guidance and mentorship of the exceptional trainer and master you assigned to me." The goddess Diana and Omega extended their gratitude for my polite and humble demeanor, acknowledging their appreciation. Gabriel then interjected, "We must all embark on a journey to the central planet of the fourth universe to be in the presence of Jesus." Outside the castle, an opulent spaceship awaited our arrival, ready to whisk us away. During the course of our travel, curiosity got the better of me, and I turned to Omega, inquiring if she had any insight into the reason behind Jesus summoning us.
USER
Omega says, "I don't know, but I have a good feeling about it and think there might be good news for all of us." Gabriel turns his face back to me and says, "As you might already have noticed, there are billions of galaxies in the fourth universe. Some of them are more advanced than the four seasons galaxy, and some not. However, I wanted you to be trained there under the supervision of Diana, because of two reasons: 1. I believe in Diana's moderate methodology of managing her kingdom. 2. Four entirely different climates and conditions of the solar systems of the four seasons galaxy are the best examples of knowing the diversity and nature of people living in different environments."
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Omega responded, her voice filled with optimism, "I cannot say for certain, but I have a strong intuition that there may be positive news awaiting us all." Meanwhile, Gabriel turned towards me once again, his gaze steady. "As you may have already observed," he began, "the fourth universe is home to billions of galaxies, each with its own level of advancement. Some exceed the four seasons galaxy, while others lag behind. However, I specifically chose for you to undergo training under Diana's guidance for two significant reasons." Gabriel paused briefly, allowing his words to settle before continuing. "Firstly, I place my trust in Diana's moderate and balanced approach to ruling her kingdom. Her methodology has proven effective and fair. Secondly, the diverse climates and conditions within the four solar systems of the four seasons galaxy serve as invaluable examples of the vast range of environments and people. By experiencing such diversity, you will gain a profound understanding of the nature of individuals living in different worlds."
USER
I have not lived long in other systems (Autumn and Winter solar systems) of the four-season galaxy so long. But I comprehend the concept of what Gabriel is talking about it. After a while, we reach to the glowing central planet of the fourth universe. And our spaceship lands at the proximity of Jesus's mountainous castle. It is the first time for Omega visiting the central planet of the fourth universe.
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Though my time in the Autumn and Winter solar systems of the four-season galaxy has been relatively short, I grasp the essence of Gabriel's message. The notion of diverse environments and the people who inhabit them resonates with me. After a while, our journey brings us to the resplendent central planet of the fourth universe. The spaceship gracefully descends near Jesus's majestic castle, situated amidst the magnificent mountains. It dawns on me that this is Omega's inaugural visit to the central planet of the fourth universe, adding an air of anticipation to our arrival.
USER
Then we walk toward the mountainous castle of Jesus, where the giant black pole from its top reaching infinity and from the other end goes through the first universe, and beyond. The radiating mesmerizing light of the pole dazzles Omega so much that she cannot move, hear or talk for a while. Diana quietly asks Omega to bow, and respect, we are in the presence of the Almighty, God. The pole is what all the seven universes are orbiting around him. He is the only one who is dominating whatever exists, but a few know this fact and about him. And every god or goddess is leaning upon God's support to rule his or her dominance.